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master arminas
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 Posted: 22-Apr-2014 16:46 Post subject: Comments on "Scorpio Ascendant" |
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Well, so that you can enjoy the story without seeing comments in between snippets, I am creating this second thread just for your input, thoughts, and ideas on the story.
You can read Scorpio Ascendant in the fiction section of Model.net.
Anyway, I do hope that ya'll enjoy the story. And never fear, this one is complete and finished. I am just posting it slowly to avoid overloading you fellows.
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master arminas
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| Posted: 26-Apr-2014 23:59 Post subject: Comments on "Scorpio Ascendant" |
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No comments or questions at all? I am saddened.
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| Posted: 27-Apr-2014 01:48 Post subject: Re: Comments on "Scorpio Ascendant" |
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| master arminas wrote: | No comments or questions at all? I am saddened.
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to busy to read it.
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| Posted: 27-Apr-2014 07:25 Post subject: Re: Comments on "Scorpio Ascendant" |
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I'm at least trying to push myself through the 'Mechs and fighters in the TRO, but it takes time.
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| Posted: 27-Apr-2014 11:21 Post subject: Comments on "Scorpio Ascendant" |
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Having read it when you posted on Ricks site, I loved it. It made sense and gives a better take on things.
The mechs are well done, the plot is good and has depth and the characters have more depth and dimensions then many of the canon ones.
Overall a good read!
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master arminas
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| Posted: 27-Apr-2014 12:05 Post subject: Re: Comments on "Scorpio Ascendant" |
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| Karagin wrote: | Having read it when you posted on Ricks site, I loved it. It made sense and gives a better take on things.
The mechs are well done, the plot is good and has depth and the characters have more depth and dimensions then many of the canon ones.
Overall a good read! |
I've cleaned it up and corrected some errors in the text as well as fixing some problems that I didn't realize at the time. Glad that you enjoyed it, though.
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| Posted: 27-Apr-2014 13:57 Post subject: Re: Comments on "Scorpio Ascendant" |
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There are stats missing on two omnis.
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| Posted: 27-Apr-2014 23:27 Post subject: Re: Comments on "Scorpio Ascendant" |
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| Sleeping Dragon wrote: | | There are stats missing on two omnis. |
Oops. Sorry about that it is now fixed. Both the Desert Tiger and Goliath Scorpion now have the code blocks for their stats.
The fluff text is for a another AU that I am working on, but the 'Mechs, ASF, and DropShips will be appearing in Scorpio Ascendant as well. So ignore the fluff for the purpose of the current book.
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| Posted: 05-May-2014 00:28 Post subject: Comments on "Scorpio Ascendant" |
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Just some basic information: the story itself is 266 pages in MS Office (Verdana 9 font) with nearly 160,000 words. As of the last post (the election of the ilKhan), we are up to the end of page 59. So, we're less than a quarter of the way in! Buckle your seatbelts and put your dining trays in the upright, locked position sportsfans; we're in for a ride!
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| Posted: 07-May-2014 19:22 Post subject: Comments on "Scorpio Ascendant" |
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Just posted the last bit of Chapter Two. Chapter Three will see a . . . pivot in the story as we bring in new characters and new points of view.
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| Posted: 11-May-2014 00:00 Post subject: Comments on "Scorpio Ascendant" |
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Author's Insight: Scorpio Ascendant
This fic began as a piece to explore how the Invasion might have differed from reality had another Clan, a very DIFFERENT Clan, been part of the invasion force. But as I examined that idea, and tossed around my thoughts with other readers, I came to realize that my ambitions were a little constricted.
So, I went back to the drawing boards and reread Warden Clans and Crusader Clans, and thought how to redo Revival in such a way that could account for one of the smaller Clans to transform into a genuine powerhouse . . . respected and (to a degree) feared by their fellow Clan Warriors.
Having always liked the concept of the Scorpions, I selected them.
The first part of the story necessarily focused on the Scorpions and the Homeworlds . . . because you, faithful readers, had to KNOW how the Scorpions had transformed themselves. And in doing so, how they managed to change the invasion.
I hope I managed to do that in a manner that doesn't trigger your sense of disbelief; too many stories (both canon and fan-fic) make Clan Warriors one-dimensional. Caricatures of mustache-twirling villians that are not believed as REAL, BREATHING, LIVING people.
I hope that I have managed to make the characters come to life and FEEL like they are real. Sure, the Clans have a VERY different culture and mindset . . . but deep down inside, they are still human. Still us. With nobility and treachery; honor and deceit; good and evil.
Having brought the Clans to the brink of the Invasion, I needed to then witch Point-of-View to the Inner Sphere to see HOW that they can possibly stop this juggernaut.
You see, I never intended for this story to be a 'curb-stomp'. And, indeed, I was stressing over HOW (short of a deus ex machina) to get the IS up to speed. And then I remembered the Dragoons and Kerlin Ward.
Bingo. What if Kerlin sends Jaime that final message? What happens if Jaime decides to 'get skin in the game' and ACTUALLY PREPARE for the coming tsunami?
All of the Prologue, Chapter One, and Chapter Two are events leading up to the launch of Revival. I won't reveal ahead of time what is to come, but I do hope that you enjoy the ride.
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| Posted: 15-May-2014 18:57 Post subject: Comments on "Scorpio Ascendant" |
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Chapter three is now completed. No thoughts?
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| Posted: 19-May-2014 11:53 Post subject: Re: Comments on "Scorpio Ascendant" |
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| master arminas wrote: | Chapter three is now completed. No thoughts?
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I wish I had the time to read it!
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master arminas
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| Posted: 22-May-2014 13:41 Post subject: Comments on "Scorpio Ascendant" |
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Chapter Four is up and finished. Now we begin the last, great battle of our times as the Clan Invasion begins in force.
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| Posted: 02-Jun-2014 11:00 Post subject: Comments on "Scorpio Ascendant" |
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And with the latest post, Chapter Five (and Part II) are now complete. We start to enter the end-game now, along with the final third of the book.
I do hope that I have been able to present the Clan Invasion in a much more rational and believable fashion; that your Sense of Disbelief has not been strained in reading this tale. And that you have enjoyed it.
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